Hi everyone. I am attaching a draft set of paragraphs for David Clark's final report on the Summit. You'll see that they consist of one paragraph on process and then essentially a translation of our powerpoint from Thursday afternoon into text form.

Suggestions on improvements are welcome, especially if they arrive quickly.

Ellen

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I did a little editing (using "track changes")

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Thanks, Martin. These are nice changes.

Martin Weiss said:
I did a little editing (using "track changes")

Martin
Ellen - excellent writeup, Martin - excellent changes. Here are some minor comments.

I suggest adding the title - Internet for Everyone (Really). Dave is likely to need one.

In order to identify ourselves as IFER from now on, I suggest that we add the word "finally" between the words "and" and "Internet" in the sentence before the first bullet.

Rest looks good.

Thanks,
Sneha

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